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I was wondering whether it is okay to write like this or not:

I never went for the grooves. But I did take a seat near the bar table and checked out the pretty ladies. Drinking was not my cup of tea. Alcohol. Alcohol was not my cup of tea. Wait, let me reframe it. . . I did not drink.

Can I write sentences like these - 'okay wait, let me reframe it. . . I did not drink.'

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  • Proofreading requests are off-topic here, I'm closing this.
    – Goodbye Stack Exchange
    Commented Nov 29, 2012 at 4:22
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    I wish I could downvote moderator decisions. This is not a request for proofreading a specific sentence, this is a question about using certain tools of style.
    – SF.
    Commented Nov 29, 2012 at 9:12
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    @Neil, actually, this was not proofreading.
    – Amin Mohamed Ajani
    Commented Nov 29, 2012 at 10:25
  • I can see if this is closed for being subjective (which it is) but it's not about proofreading.
    – Lauren-Clear-Monica-Ipsum
    Commented Nov 29, 2012 at 10:59
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    @JohnSmithers I like your title change.
    – Lauren-Clear-Monica-Ipsum
    Commented Dec 3, 2012 at 17:33

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"Is it okay..." and "Can I..." are subjective. It's about context.

Are the sentences grammatically correct? Strictly speaking, no. But you are clearly writing in a first-person, casual, stream-of-consciousness dictation style, so they are perfectly fine for that.

Speaking as an editor, as long as this is your character's/narrator's voice, and you're consistent, I would be entirely fine with this type of writing, and wouldn't mark it up to be "fixed."

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  • Thanks Lauren. This is what most of the youth in my country like. Hence the writing style. :)
    – Amin Mohamed Ajani
    Commented Nov 29, 2012 at 10:26

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