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How to represent jealousy in a cute way?
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One way that I have seen in real life is the combination of self-awareness and levity. It is important that self-awareness happens in the moment. Many people realize too late that they had done ...

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How to trick the reader into thinking they're following a redshirt instead of the protagonist?
18 votes

Write from the POV of the monster. This way the prey can be described in more dismissive terms. You can then add inner thoughts of the monster. Dismissive thoughts about how this one does what they ...

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Everyone is beautiful
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17 votes

Some people see beauty in the world outside of the perfection of conventional beauty standards that Hollywood portrays. Have your narrator fall into this category. (Okay you already decided that, so ...

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Should we add a character in a story for realistic effect?
14 votes

Leave them out You don't seem to want to write about or develop the doctor and they don't seem to have much value to you. If that is the case then you should probably leave them out. The simplest way ...

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Should we avoid having a protagonist of a different ethnicity than ours if we don't know anything about their culture?
10 votes

The simplest answer is: Research. There is no justification for not doing the research. If you know nothing of the culture, don't use it. If you want to use it, go learn about it. You are very highly ...

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Mortal danger in mid-grade literature
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I had a similar experience with The Hobbit. But I don't think that's because of the target age of the audience. I think it is because of the style of story that it was. Plucky adventurer full of pluck ...

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What are some ways of extending a description of a scenery?
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When describing scenery is coming out a little flat, I try to add a few specific items to be descriptive about. I usually pick three or seven because they are magic numbers (depending on how much ...

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How can I indicate a magical compulsion to protect someone without truly disclosing it?
8 votes

Mirror addiction. Addiction is very much a compulsive behavior. Often times feeding that addiction is fun and exactly what the person wants. And often times it is unpleasant with significant ...

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What challenges are there in writing a fantasy cookbook?
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7 votes

First, consider the characteristics of the fantasy element in a world-building sense. Then you have a baseline understanding of what your dragon steak is like. You could do a one to one comparison. ...

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Critique vs nitpicking
7 votes

I think that the biggest problem here is that this was not critique. It was unconstructive criticism. That reader didn't enjoy the mood you set in your piece. That is fine. There are styles of writing ...

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How to determine which details are important enough to be mentioned in a text-based roleplay?
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7 votes

In a group context such as this I think emulating the behavior of the group is best. Use similar word counts. Detail similar aspects. If the people of the group don't typically describe certain ...

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Crossing the line between justified force and brutality
6 votes

Justification is a theme for you to explore You decide what is justified. You decide what gives someone the right to do what she does. Do the ends justify the means? For the greater good. Fear and ...

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When blogging recipes, how can I support both readers who want the narrative/journey and ones who want the printer-friendly recipe?
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You can put your content into a <div id="recipeXYZ"> nested normally within your blog post. Then you can load the content to a print page dynamically. Now you can print from your original page, ...

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Is wanting to ask what to write an indication that you need to change your story?
5 votes

I couldn't disagree more! I almost argued in the comments but restrained myself because that would have been tangential and unproductive. Sure, asking what to write and not being able to write about ...

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Map-making software
5 votes

Tiled is an RPG map editor. It is completely free. It works with tilemaps which can be sourced for free but may be more challenging for you because of your peculiar use case. The program is fairly ...

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Fiction: Living next door to a CEO
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There are plenty of rich people who live far more modest than their means would allow. There are plenty of poor people who live far more well off than their means would allow. That they would meet ...

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I'm trying to figure out whether to discovery write or outline. How do I choose which is right for me?
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Outlines are a tool. Nothing more. Should you use it? I don't know, that depends on you. Does the added structure help you focus and develop your story? or is it needless distraction that you ...

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Indicating multiple different modes of speech (fantasy language or telepathy)
3 votes

Many publishers set their own standards for justification and the choice may not be up to you. On top of that many books are simply justified. As time passes on your work may end up on different ...

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What is the best way to simulate grief?
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The best way I know of is to make the reader feel the grief too. By this I mean you build the character so well, make them so loved, that when they die it hurts. Then the reader doesn't just imagine ...

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Should we write a long prologue if the main component of our novel is the original world building?
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You have extensive world-building. That's good. You need all that. All of it. The reader does not. If you spend half the length of the story just building a world for me I am not going to finish. It ...

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Making science for toddlers easy to remember
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In my house we are fond of Chris Ferrie, who I believe did this well. He uses some of the ideas present in other answers, that I'll not repeat. I will simply add that he also develops vocabulary ...

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How to use metaphors and similes in a good dose?
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Similes are like a fine wine, best savored slowly but consistently. Metaphors are bulldozers. They will help move your work for you but they are big and too many can get in the way of each other. But ...

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Making him into a bully (how to show mild violence)
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A lot of the answers cover the bully's main strength well: intimidation. And as every well-meaning adult will explain to a bully victim, the bully doesn't really want to fight, they are relying on the ...

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Showing friendship between people of different ranks - maintain formality, or drop it?
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If you can, lose the formality. By definition, the familiar terms are, well, more familiar. Whereas formality is a constant reminder of rank. I for one felt the constant reference to Frodo as master ...

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Third person story, containing a first person backstory
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Are you changing narrators? Think of your Third-Person story as being told by a single narrator. Now when you get to the back-story, does the character who is being talked about take over the ...

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How do I sound like Thanos when I write?
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Thanos is a narcissist of the highest order. He speaks in such a commanding way because he believes unwaveringly that his every idea is superior to that of any other being. He twists every action, ...

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