New answers tagged short-story
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I really don't see much problems with your writing. If you have to be descriptive, explaining what the character did, where they look, how they breathed, it is fine.
But if it is simply "he said, she said", those can be ignored and removed unless it helps with the pace/clarity of who is talking/etc. Besides that, only put those in when details ...
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