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Is head-hopping always bad?

It's fine if the switch is clearly intentional and well sectioned-off. It's fine to jump between POVs for say, chapters or whole scenes. What isn't all right is a book that mostly is one POV, but ...
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When the main character talks to the camera, is that 3rd person or another technical term for point of view?

For a character to reveal private thoughts by talking is a soliloquy. The pretext is that the character is just thinking but has to talk so the audience knows them. On the other hand, if you mean the ...
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How do I portray irrational anger in first person?

To the person experiencing anger, it won't appear irrational. To them, there's a very good reason why they're angry, why they're infuriated. What you need is to show the reason. Now, the reason might ...
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How can I portray a character with no fear of death, without them sounding utterly bored?

Psychopathy is characterised by persistent antisocial behaviour, impaired empathy and remorse. (source: Wikipedia) Your character needs to care for others. Watching a person get hurt, let alone ...
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How do I portray irrational anger in first person?

Well, you can try using short words to display bouts of rage, using really simple words in the speech with a slurry of verbs scattered intermittently. You can also emphasize repetition because people ...
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Is using first person in academic/technical essays always bad?

This depends on your style guide and potentially your teacher/school/boss/etc.'s guidelines. If your teacher (for example) says to avoid using the first person you may be able to negotiate to change ...
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When the main character talks to the camera, is that 3rd person or another technical term for point of view?

This sounds like the TV trope Breaking the Fourth Wall: tvtropes - Breaking The Fourth Wall But the precise thing that you remember might be a related trope. In the sitcom Liv and Maddie, the ...
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Is head-hopping always bad?

Dune head hops the whole way through and is still held up by many as an example of a Sci-fi great. The rule to any writing mechanic is that it must be executed smoothly, consistently, in a way that ...
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How can I portray a character with no fear of death, without them sounding utterly bored?

I would challenge her lack of fear, if her ability can't trigger automatically as stated in comments she should still have some fear of death, things can happen around her that she isn't aware of and ...
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How can I portray a character with no fear of death, without them sounding utterly bored?

What I suspect you're really asking here is, "How do I make scenes involving this character feel adrenaline-filled and emotional?" To answer that question, you have to realize that portraying this ...
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Can a scene be written to be disorienting and not be too confusing to readers?

If you want the scene to initially be confusing, go ahead! Since it's written in first person, that's just realistic. However, keep it brief. It would probably be rather annoying to try to read ...
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How do you convey that an action is subconscious when writing in first person?

If it's something that is being done unconsciously, then the first-person narrator probably wouldn't realize she's doing it, until she had already done it, or someone else pointed it out. Two quick ...
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How to find different ways to express things that happen to the reader?

For the sensory input, instead of "you see/feel/smell/touch/taste," try moving the thing to the front of the sentence or phrase to make it the subject. Instead of "You see a shiny red rock," try: ...
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Can I state a fact in a first person story?

The subject of your sentence can be something other than the MC when you're writing in first person. For example: My phone rang or Footsteps were coming down the alley behind me You don't need ...
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How do I portray irrational anger in first person?

A trick I have learned and have been practicing recently is to stop every now and then and observe myself living in the moment instead of just living it. Its hard to do, but gets easier as you ...
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New style of first person pov

The narration. I'm thinking of not using the narration at all. Please don't do this. It is very, very hard to understand even when handled by a master. If this is your first book, it will be almost ...
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To what extent can a first person narrative tell someone else's story?

The most famous example of what you're describing is Sherlock Holmes, told of course from Dr. Watson's POV. Watson never becomes the protagonist of the story - the focus is always on Holmes, Watson ...
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Is head-hopping always bad?

Take a look at The Couple Next Door. There is a fair amount of the more traditionally-accepted head hopping and it works fine. It's a recent title. The advice against head hopping is, I believe, ...
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How do I portray irrational anger in first person?

Personally, I don't think there IS an internal monologue; irrational anger is all feeling and emotion, perhaps single words, and I would describe those, not try to transcribe those thoughts. The ...
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To rewrite or not to rewrite?

Great question! I believe that the person you write in does not limit stylistic choices. You can still have descriptive passages in first person. Just to illustrate this, I modified your first person ...
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How to write from a rich "bad boy's" perspective?

I think the best way to write from his perspective would be to emphasize the way what he means is quite different from the way people perceive him, so as to show that his 'bad boy' nature is, in fact, ...
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First Person vs. Third Person: Advantages and Disadvantages?

Although I have read a few things I liked written from the first person, I can't write that way myself; it is far too limiting and constrained. For one, the POV character has to be in every frikkin' ...
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Is head-hopping always bad?

I am a scientist, and my first reaction to poorly argued questions is often to criticize the logic. Which I will do here, but before I do, I will say there is nothing inherently wrong with head-...
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first point of view and the problem of opinion

You can expose opinions in third person POV. In "close" third person you're extremely likely to expose the third person POV character's opinions. And even in third person omniscient, you could have an ...
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How do I portray irrational anger in first person?

Ask yourself (or inquire) what such a person is experiencing. It could be "I remember shaking, and then the next thing I knew was...", and they know how they felt (hot, exhausted?) and are told by ...
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