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I need help writing a scene or experience about air being knocked out of you

How would you write a scene of someone trying to breath again after getting the wind knocked out of them? I am trying to describe the experience and how your body reacts physically while your brain ...
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Writing about drug induced hallucinations and paranoia

Not long ago I wrote a short story about a mathematics graduate student on the verge of a nervous breakdown. The young student is innocent and working to finish a difficult mathematical derivation ...
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Which Is Clearer: 'Being pressed' or 'Pressed'?

Consider these two sentences: [1] Being pressed against the wall, he struggled to break free. [2] Pressed against the wall, he struggled to break free. I've recently spent some time reading grammar ...
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Describing exclaimations from a group

My character, an old woman, has been knocked down, injured and can't get up. There is a crowd of people, spread across a park, who all witnessed the accident. From her view, at ground level, she is ...
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How to refer to alternate versions of a character in a non-sci-fi way?

I'm writing a story featuring a plot element which is a variation on A Christmas Carol involving the multiverse. A character is escorted to other timelines, where she looks at where those versions of ...
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How can I find good words to describe emotions or states of mind?

For example, if I struggle with finding good words to describe being confused and in two minds, what techniques can I use to find figures of speech or adjectives?
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What are good words to refer to the condition of objects?

In RPG games objects such as weapons or armor have a certain durability represented by a number. For example a sword has 100/100 Durability. After it becomes 0/100 it means the object is broken. I ...
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What are some widely understood incremental injury adjectives?

I'm looking for adjectives to describe incremental degrees of injuries of various body parts for an RPG system. They should be both intuitively understandable and rankable to an average English ...
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What's Essential In A Combat Scene?

I've just been reading a bunch of Jim Butcher's Dresden Files books. Although they were the most enjoyable read I'd had in ages I always found myself skimming long segments that described involved ...
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How can I describe characters based on real world races like "Asian" or "Indian" in a fantasy world?

In a fantasy world where things like Asia don’t exist how would you get the point across that a person may be a pale Asian person with straight black hair and blue eyes and a heart shaped face rather ...
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How to write about characters and places you aren't personally familiar with?

What do I need to do, as an Indian writer, if I want to make British or Americans the main characters in my book, and make the whole story revolve around them in any other country? In general, is it ...
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How to describe a character accepting congratulation in a modest, self-deprecating fashion

I am trying to describe how my protagonist reacts to congratulations from a friend about a genuinely significant career achievement. My protagonist is modest and self-deprecating by nature, and I am ...
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Trouble describing people standing around three of four sides of a rectangle?

As the title says, I am having trouble describing a group standing around 3/4ths of a rectangle. This is what I have written The students stood along the sides and far side of the stage, creating a ...
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How do you find the right rhetorical device to describe the towering trees in a primeval forest?

During my trip, I visited the primitive forest and was deeply shocked by the scenery in the forest: the trees were strong and straight, and the environment was full of vitality and quiet. Therefore, I ...
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How do you describe a woman's lips without seeming cliche?

What is the best way to describe a woman's lips without being cliche? I can't help but think "pillow" or "pouty" but that's wrong. I looked through all the synonyms for words like ...
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How do I draw attention to a girl's chest without making it overly lewd?

So, I have a group of main characters, and the current viewpoint character is going to introduce a... very well-endowed character. How do I write this so that I get the point across that she's that ...
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How Do I Keep My Writing Interesting?

I'm a beginning writer, and I constantly find myself struggling with my own sentences. Sometimes I even find them boring and uninteresting which I know can be a serious killer if I want to keep my ...
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How does one describe a setting that is going to be a central location in a story?

I have a location in my story that is a key central hub which much of the interaction surrounds. An example of this might be the bar in Cheers or Greendale Community College in Community. I want to ...
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How to go about describing an anthro protagonist?

I'm working on a rewrite of a story of mine. One of the improvements I'm trying to make is avoiding the block of physical description text, and trying to use more show-don't-tell. So far, all I've ...
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Knife meets eye socket question

I'm writing a story and want to immerse the readers by describing the sound of a knife being pulled out of an eye socket. I can't think of a good word. It'd be descriptive, wet, and grating. It could ...
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I have inadvertently made my character depressed... what should I do about it?

I have inadvertently made my character depressed. She's a minor character in my science-fantasy novel, and exists to tie together some of the plot lines. As I wrote her, this 18yo woman turned out to ...
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Need resources to assist with describing ordinary things

When writing I've found that I have trouble describing ordinary things. For instance if I want to describe a chair I'll spend lots of time hunting down resources like this chair diagram, using google ...
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Describing paralyzing fear in the first person

I would appreciate some suggestions that would help me describe intense terrifying fear that my main character feels when the airplane he is on suddenly goes into a seemingly out of control dive that ...
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How do I describe a character who had a leg ripped off?

I’m a new writer writing a fantasy story. A character had a leg ripped off below the knee and I’m not sure how to describe that. It’s in a first person perspective by one of the other characters ...
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x-based y phrasing descriptions

I am trying to find the proper way to describe the following: outcome-based benchmarking, outcome-based contracting, outcome-based designs, performance-based education, performance-based management, ...
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How to describe a sinister expression

I'm a noob at writing and I wanted to find out how to describe someone's face contorting into a sinister expression. I'm having a bit of trouble doing so. The most prominent features I want to focus ...
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How to I describe a kissing scene that’s off guard?

I have to write a really spicy kissing scene where the mob boss kisses a random girl who has never been kissed before, who is beyond shocked at his actions. Only to find out that he kissed her to get ...
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What's the best way to describe an event in slow motion?

In my story I'm gonna have the main character's dog die. I want to make it seem like the dog's death is really quick, but the main character screaming is stretched out. What would the best way to go ...
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How to describe the appearance of POV characters in limited 3rd person POV

A limited 3rd person story is 3rd person, sure, but it is also supposed to paint the description with the perspective of the POV character. Now, I don't typically picture how I look whenever I do ...
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How can I write a book where a lot of explaining needs to happen on what is visually seen?

I have a story in mind that I would like to put onto paper. However, this story takes place in a world vastly different to ours with complex wildlife. Think about the movie Avatar, something among ...
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Describing light like water

I am currently working on writing a storyline for a text-based videogame. I am trying to describe how there is very little light coming into the room that the character is entering, as the window is ...
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Can you switch from past to present tense to expound on an action?

If the text is primarily past tense, can you briefly switch to present tense to expound on an action? An example is as follows. She took one step before the brass bell above her door echoed a sharp ...
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Need help with proper terms for a fantasy character's clothing/armor

Can someone please tell me what the white garment underneath his armor would be called in this picture? I'm trying to refer to a piece like it in my story, but I don't know the proper term for it. I'm ...
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For people of color, are there unique ways to describe emotional state through skin tone, besides 'going pale,' 'turning red,' 'looking green,' etc?

Are there some words or phrases to describe a person of color, specifically darker colors, when their skin tone changes with emotion? Like for a white person, they'd turn pale when scared or turn red ...
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How do I describe an accidental kiss between the two main characters that is romantic as well as regretful?

How do I describe an accidental kiss between the two main characters? I want to make it so they got caught up in the situation and that both of them apologise to each other after that, like a kiss ...
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"Write what you know", or, writing when you're young and ignorant

When you were raised in a remote town in Europe, there really isn't much that you've experienced. I'm 21 and I often struggle with writing because I just do not know how 'these things' work. I can't ...
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How could I show good worldbuilding without ending up with info-dumps?

A horror story I am writing involves the protagonist in another world. It is like an isekai, but it is horror and the protagonist is trying to survive as long as possible. The main story surrounds the ...
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How do you portray a character stumbling into something foreign?

I want to know what I should portray when it comes for a character to come across something "foreign" or new. For example: A magical boy from a fantasy land being flung to a modern/science-y ...
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How can I remove the repetition of 'the' from descriptive writing

Consider this paragraph The twilight is small but distinctly visible. The gloomy sky is staring down at the parched roads as the storm began thundering. Gradually, the moon is crescendoing into ...
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How to describe types of hum a character uses to convey their thoughts and opinions

I have a character who struggles to put his thoughts, feelings and opinions into words - he finds words somewhat too contained and specifically defined to adequately convey what he wants to say. He ...
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How to describe when someone hesitates before speaking?

I find myself repeatedly saying "he/she hesitated" when I feel like there's something else I could say. I've been experimenting but with the character in question, all I can think of is, &...
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How to describe a werewolf attack?

In my book, the werewolves don't shape shift into humans, they're werewolves all the time. There are some werewolves that don't attack humans, but the majority does - those packs that don't live ...
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Should I use he, she, or it when referring to a bird as a metaphor for my cell phone?

I'm writing a descriptive essay about a bird, which is a metaphor of my cell phone. So far, I have been using the pronoun "it" when describing the bird/cell phone; however, it feels awkward as the ...
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How to describe someone whose eyes sparkle mischievously?

I've been told that I'm telling instead of showing when I say my characters' eyes sparkle 'mischievously.' How do you describe something like that? I've been looking it up and trying different tricks ...
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How can I describe actions in a story format?

I am trying to create a description/story about what someone will do, for example a description of a man baking a cake, because I need to create descriptions of actions as part of my work. I know that ...
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Music in written form

I have a very hard time describing music in my writing. There's a particular scene where two characters are dancing along to piano music. It's a nice, romantic moment where they're the only people ...
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How do you describe the sound of a body being dragged through the snow? [closed]

How to describe the sound of a body bring dragged through snow
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How do you describe/insert an "uncommon" feature?

We have the typical common hair that's black, brown, yellow, etc. And we can call them brunets, blondes, redheads, and so on. Even with eyes. We call them blue-eyed, brown-eyed, gray, etc. What do you ...
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How can I write a young adult character as very excited without sounding like a child?

I want to show my young adult main character, as being very enthusiastic and excitable about her interests, mainly I want her to make a big deal about wanting to wear her mother's ceremonial (but ...
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How to write believable characters of professions I'm not familiar with?

I'm quite familiar with certain groups of people. In my career I often dealt with scientists, actors and artists. Therefore I'm quite confident describing such people in my stories. I am familiar with ...

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