so basically, i am writing a story where there are two main characters. every chapter, the perspective swaps between the two main characters. the thing is, i'm writing the story in third person past tense. i usually write in this style. but, i feel like third person writing doesn't convey the emotions, actions, and feelings of the characters very well. I've been considering rewriting the story to be in first person (still past tense). this wouldn't be too difficult, as i only have a few chapters written. but, i worry that if i rewrite the story in first person, it wont be as descriptive as i would like. descriptive writing is very important to me, as it helps establish the feel of the entire story, which is dark, dirty, and overall grimy. i worry that by writing the story in first person, it will be much less descriptive. let me give you an example of what i mean.
Mandy stepped into the room. the floor was yellowed, and he could see dirt encrusted between the kitchen tiles. "Tom?" His voice echoed eerily. "Are you in here?"
I stepped into the room, eyeing the grimy floor. I should clean that later. Focusing on the task at hand, i glanced around the dim kitchen. "Tom?" my voice echoed eerily. "Are you in here?"
the forest felt so horribly familiar, and Tom felt a sense of guilt at what had happened here five years ago. He trod though the leaves alone, flinching at every crunch and snap of twigs. the trees weren't thick, but there was clearly no moon.
I walked briskly through the leaves, feeling all manner of emotions claw at my heartstrings. guilt, fear, emptiness. i knew this whole situation sounded like something out of a bad move, but that didn't make me feel any better. i grimaced, noticing the lack of moon in the sky.
then again, i could just go back and add in more descriptions of the character's thoughts and feelings. please go easy, i'm an amateur writer.