I’m editing a first person story and I’m a bit stumped on one thing in particular. I’m not sure how to explain this in a non-confusing way.
Is it okay or correct to mix the dialogue and actions of one character, with the actions of another?
For example:
“You okay, buddy?” he asked. I scoffed and looked away.
“Yes. Fine.” I snapped. He laughed and looked down, his hair falling into his eyes.
Or, should it be this way:
“You okay, buddy?” he asked.
I scoffed and looked away. “Yes. Fine.” I snapped.
He laughed and looked down, his hair falling into his eyes.
Alternatively:
“You okay, buddy?” he asked.
I scoffed and looked away.
“Yes. Fine.” I snapped.
He laughed and looked down, his hair falling in his eyes.
Which is the correct way?