The following is the opening of a short story I'm writing:
Erin stared at Ruth, eyes narrowed. "There was an earthquake last night?"
Ruth nodded. "Around 9p.m. The news says it was a 4.3 on the Ritcher scale."
Erin searched through her memory, but came up with nothing. What I was doing at that time? she wondered. One thing for sure: she wasn't asleep. She didn't go to bed that early. If for any reason she had fallen asleep, the intense shaking would have woken her up immediately. After all, she wasn't a heavy sleeper. It occurred to her that maybe she had indeed felt earthquake, it just that she didn't remember it. But she decided to discard that hypothesis. She didn't consider herself particularly smart. But when it came to remembering things, specially events of that magnitude, her brain never failed her. Only one possibility was left; she didn't fell the earthquake. But how can that be? She asked herself. The idea couldn't fit into her mind.
"I don't remember feeling any shaking," Erin finally said.
"That's strange," Ruth said, and grabbed a cigarette from her purse, and lit it.
They remained silent for a moment, lost in their thoughts. Erin stared at the neon sign beside her. Ruth was smoking her cigarette, and glancing at the other tables from time to time.
- Does it grab the reader's attention (starting from the first line)?
- Does this opening make you want to keep reading?