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I am writing an essay for a course with the title 'A day in the life', I have never thought about doing this before but for some reason I am running with it. What are your thoughts for something like the below:

So that’s what my company does but…


**Where do I fit in?**

I was thinking about doing this throughout the essay but as it's not something I've done before I'm not sure whether to do this as a one of, none of or a running theme. So essentially is it ever okay to have the last sentence of a paragraph a broken sentence with an ellipsis which is completed by the next tile?

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  • As a pattern, it could be seen as too cute (precious). I'd prefer: So that’s what my company does, but where do I fit in? Then the following title repeats "Where Do I Fit In?"
    – Yosef Baskin
    May 24, 2021 at 15:43
  • Interesting, what do you think of rhetorical questions as the last sentence? 'That's enough about me for now, what exactly is 'mycompany' and what do they do? Title.. 'All about mycompany' Does one read better than the other? i.e. the rhetorical question or the emphasis of the title in the last sentence as you suggested above, or would you say having a variance would avoid being too 'precious'?
    – KDE
    May 24, 2021 at 15:56

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Over-cute, a Little pretentious, but Unique enough to potentially work:

I can totally see someone thinking this is too clever, and it's definitely an obnoxiously cute idea. It's not proper English and for a class, that may mean it will be poorly graded. BUT it is fairly unique, and in the world of writing today, unique at least stands out. If your audience appreciates character and personal expression, and is willing to overlook just how clever it's being, it will make your work stand out.

So really, it's entirely about your audience. If it's for a class, ASK the professor if they appreciate experimental techniques. If they do, you're set. If they tell you you're deviating from the formula and will be graded accordingly, then there's your answer.

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  • Thanks man, thankfully 1) it's not an English essay, it's for a Data Analysis course so hopefully I can get away with it. 2) I can submit a couple of drafts before submission so I guess I'll get some feedback from the first draft. I am trying to deviate slightly from the status quo, mainly by adding a slight bit of humor in the opening Introduction; with the readers in mind. I mean they must be bored to death reading so many of these 10-20 page essays about a day in someone's life, might as well try stand out/make it a little bit different. Thanks for the answer!
    – KDE
    May 24, 2021 at 16:06
  • Thanks. For future reference, it's good etiquette to upvote right away, but wait to accept an answer until about 24 hours after asking (because you can get answers from people all around the world and with all sorts of schedules). Accepting an answer means people are less likely to give you additional (potentially better) answers.
    – DWKraus
    May 24, 2021 at 20:36
  • @Yosef Baskin Thank you, I didn't notice the error.
    – DWKraus
    May 24, 2021 at 20:37
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Honestly, I'm not sure if it's OK for an essay. But creativity it sounds great. You can tell how your character feels.

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