For my English class, we had to write an essay on The Prince and while I thought that my essay had a good structure and sufficiently proved my claim, my professor thought it read like a "high school essay".
I understand that it's better to build a narrative in your essay and a line of reasoning that logically follows one after the other, but is the traditional high school essay always bad? For some theses, I think it's ok to prove them by presenting the various types of evidence (with a defined structure) without having them necessarily build on one another.
Like if I wanted to prove that a person had murdered someone, I would first present witnesses that can identify the man at the scene of the crime, motives & relations to the victim, and then discredit any alibis. In my opinion, because each of these items alone serves to give credence to the claim that the person is guilty, they can be presented in an almost listing format. In this case, item 1 and item 2 don't have to be true for item 3 to be effective. So in my essay, the line of reasoning was that 1 -> Thesis and 2 -> Thesis, and 3 -> Thesis and I proved that 1 and 2 and 3 are true therefore, my thesis is strengthened. But how my professor would want it is 1 therefore 2 therefore 3 thus, the thesis is strengthened. I can't see why my method would be bad for the thesis that I had.