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Can we use personification this way?

Say

His bold eyes swam through the forest.

Instead of saying:

He boldly ran through the forest.

I am wondering if this type of metaphorical language is accepted, or there are clear rule against such liberal use of figurative language.

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    There are no rules. Aug 23 '20 at 7:31
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    No rules, but it needs to be clear. Without a ton of context, it sounds like he's looking at a forest, not running through it.
    – DWKraus
    Aug 24 '20 at 20:13
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There are very few 'rules' in writing. There are conventions. For example, diaries usually use the first-person narrative perspective. Conventions can be broken if you have a good reason to do. In fiction, there is no convention against using figurative language.

However, you do need to consider whether an image works. For me this one doesn't because when I think of swimming I think of arms, legs, water and splashing. I can't see eyes doing breaststroke, for example.

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  • When you walk, the eyes are like floating in the air. That's why I thought swam made sense. What other verb would you consider using instead?
    – newton
    Aug 23 '20 at 18:25
  • @newton Drawing focus to a specific body part is the issue, not the verb. helpingwritersbecomeauthors.com/mistakes-24 Aug 23 '20 at 18:34
  • Perhaps you have given your own answer with 'floating'. Aug 23 '20 at 19:09

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