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Apparently, greed and greedy are weak words in poetry, so you can't use them, but what other words would you use?

The pirate greed for their gold.

And the adventurers are greedy

In their quests for adventures

Until an arrow in the knee they take.

I can't think of a way to reword this. It's like impossible, and I just think it's ridiculous to think of these two words as weak.

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    "Apparently, greed and greedy are weak words in poetry, so you can't use them." I agree with you that this is ridiculous. However, using both 'greed' and 'greedy' within two lines doesn't sound so good to me (unless it was part of a deliberate repetition). If you want to change one or both of them, or any other words, and you don't know what to change them to, follow Anna A. Fitzgerald's advice :) – DM_with_secrets Jun 27 at 9:27
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Many.

Consider consulting a thesaurus:

https://www.thesaurus.com/browse/greed

https://www.thesaurus.com/browse/greedy

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The English in this example is not idiomatic, and "greed" cannot be used as a verb, as appears attempted here. Also, we generally avoid repetition (greed/greedy; adventurers/adventure) unless it serves a purpose. Maybe better: Pirates lust after gold, and Adventurers are greedy in their quest for excitement ... Or: Adventurers grasp at the thrill of their quest

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    I think it might be 'pirate greed' as a noun? But I'm not sure – DM_with_secrets Jun 27 at 10:24
  • Maybe, but as the second line is a sentence with subject and predicate, one can misread the first line as being parallel to the second--as a full sentence instead of a fragment. There is nothing wrong with fragments per se, if they are effectively used.. – KayCee Jun 27 at 10:33
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    English verbs nouns regularly. However, in that case it should either be "The pirates greed for their gold", or "The pirate greeds for their gold". (Of course, with a preceding line to add context, the noun-form as suggested by @DM_with_secrets can also work) – Chronocidal Jun 30 at 9:59
  • @Chronocidal Wish I could give more than one upvote for your first sentence! – DM_with_secrets Jun 30 at 10:21

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