I have written a novel that I want to send out to agents, but I'm now having doubts as to whether it is polished enough to do so yet. A big problem for me right now is tense.
My novel is written in past tense, first person perspective. When my protagonist is describing the events in the novel, his current place in time is after the events that happened, but only by ten seconds or so if I had to place him somewhere. He does not know what will happen due to that. For all intents and purposes, he is describing things as they happen in the moment.
When he first describes himself, he uses present tense because that is how he still looks when he is doing so. Example:
"Wow, that guy's hair is so white!" a passerby said.
I was the only one he could have been talking about. There was no one else here it could have been. My hair is a pure white, alongside my also white eyes. My other features are tired and weary.
At the start of the novel in the prologue, I also described the setting in present tense because the situation at the start of the novel reflects how the world appears to the protagonist at the current time.
Should I do another edit fixing this stuff? A lot of it feels very unnatural when I change it.