"Oh for God's sake, get on with it!", the half-elf's scream boomed through the fort. The uneasines was palpable, you could probably even slice out a big chunk and eat it. [Name] glanced back at the commander
While her slender form stood out from the rest of her legionaries when he looked at her, the stern face, furrowed eyebrows and those hazel eyes emenated a demonic presence, no mortal could hope to explain. It tied noose around everyone (except for that crazed half-elf) which tightened with each second.
"Uhm, maybe we sho-", he couldn't bring himself to mutter a word more. Every bit of his body protested. But this was absurd, this would be the sixth time he would try to behead that guy, it's not like he missed, the axe hardly could do more than a papercut.
And that guy, One, as he called himself, behaved more like the executioner, and [Name] like the one about to be beheaded.
So, yes, I based this on the intro sequence of Skyrim and it's also my first attempt at writing something funny in creative-writing that's more Rejtő Jenő and less memes. Basically, I'm trying to use more classical tools.
The thing is I'm very accustomed to humor that relies on the advantages, video has over written text. In other words, I don't know what to keep in mind when writing written comedy.
So, what's the most important difference between written and audiovisual comedy that I have to keep in mind when writing?
Due to the nature of the main character (One), there are a handful of larger parts of constant comedy (levity, to be precise) that later transition into a more serious tone.