I have a piece of dialogue which sounds great in my head, and the way the character says it is important, but it never looks right when I type it out. At first I tried this:
“Looking and looking... in all the wrong places.” He dragged out his words in a sing-song sort of way.
It didn’t sound like I wanted it to when I read it over. I changed it to this:
“Looking and looking... in allll the wrong places.”
That doesn’t look quite right, either, but it gets it across better in my opinion. Would this be acceptable? Is there perhaps a better way to describe it?