My character has super-senses, so anything that we feel, see, hear, etc. are heightened for him. So much so that when a flash bomb is set a few meters from him, he is greatly affected by this.
Symptoms are loss of balance (b/c it affects the ears), a ringing? sound, and only seeing white for about 5 seconds and then some after images.
How do I convey the loss of balance without too much description? I want it to cut-cut-cut without using "--" too much. The ringing as well. How do I convey that without an obnoxious onomatopoeia? I can imagine it clearly in my head as if it was a scene from a movie but dang action scenes are difficult for me. But I couldn't avoid it and so here.
Also, here's an example for one of my drafts. Forgive me if it falls flat or short or confusing.
What—exhale— too bright, too fucking bright—can’t—can’t see—
Everything is spinning.
What the—what’s hap—
Stop—stop, it hurts, fuckfuckfuck—
A deafening ring resounds.
“…ter—stand up, get up, please!”
There are feet running past him.
(Running into him, digging into his flesh, hurting, hurting, hurting—)
He can hear the fear in their hearts, and feel the pain in their screams. He lies on the ground, feeling agony like a faraway dream.
And even though it hurts, his body is healing far too fast to fail him.
He doesn’t know what to do.
He can see things, but he doesn’t quite understand why it’s happening.