I'm currently working on a fanfiction/ comic, and a more recent scene I've been working on is a specific character re-awaking in the middle of the night to an Owl's call, and, unrelatedly, describing it as it flees.
I popped open an eye, raising my head as the rest of my body stayed suspended to the ground, as if everything else was already asleep.
I scanned the pale, orange-shaded trees, as my eyes fell on a form perched on a thin line-- a branch-- of the tallest of the many trees. It’s head was bathed in the moonlight, as it ruffled it’s feathers and stared down at me with it’s fierce, golden eyes. I squinted at the creature, as it waddled into the spotlight-- an owl.
I'm not looking to improve the descriptions, specifically because of this fic being based off of cartoons, I wasn't aiming for it to appear too 'realistic', I should say.
I'm mainly having trouble with describing the transition between the leaving of the bird, and her falling back into sleep, and even possibly describing her state of exhaustion without repeating used material.
Does anyone have any tips?