I'm writing a zombie apocalypse genre book (yes, I know it's a heavily used and abused writing genre, but I'm writing it in my way, a way I believe is a good way). Anyway, I caught myself writing "he and/or Will" one too many times in the beginning paragraph. The paragraph solely serves the purpose of making time go by (as the highly contagious zombie virus takes a little time to spread), but also to give the reader a feel of one of the main characters and my writing style. The paragraph is supposed to have a little comedic value through how I write it and through a little vulgar language. Feel free to give feedback on that too. Here it goes.
"Alright, I’ll pick up Jack from school after work, and then we’ll head to the supermarket", Mia said as she grabbed the keys to her car.
"Okay, catch some bad guys then", Will said as he kissed his wife.
"I will, you worry about doing the bare minimum on your day off", Mia said taking Jack’s hand.
"I’ll try. See you later bandit", Will said hugging his son.
"See you later dad", he said grabbing his Spider-Man backpack and heading eagerly out the door.
Mia followed and waved as she headed out the door.
Will stood silently in the middle of his simplistic abode and nodded to himself. What to do? He asked himself dumbfounded as to what he was going to do with the abundance of time he suddenly had on his hands. It wasn’t often he had a day off, and now he did. Will walked into the kitchen and poured some cheerios into a bowl, and covered it in milk, making them float like water doughnuts. He grabbed a spoon and started slurping the cereal into him whilst walking around his home. Nothing much was going on outside, he thought as he looked out of his window.
"Wow, I have truly sunk to a new level of purposelessness", he said catching himself in the act of looking out through the window like an old man.
There's more text, but I think the writing is better in that paragraph and utilized fewer "he/Wills" in it. The paragraph isn't supposed to convey much information, rather just a little text to get you started and get the "action" started. It's supermundane and boring, but I thought it was necessary. But then again, I do not know, hence me asking you all.