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I've read a few amateur stories online and sometimes the author will include so much detail that the reader gets a little bored or distracted and forgets what the actual story is talking about. How do I know whether I am using too much, not enough, or the right amount of detail?

  • I've edited your title to be more logical. Too much of anything is bad, by definition of the words "too much". I think your real question is how much is too much. Feel free to edit it again if you don't think I have captured your intent correctly, – user16226 Jan 23 '17 at 12:38
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    It can be beneficial to leave space for the reader's imagination to fill in some details. – mbomb007 Jan 23 '17 at 19:05
  • I think (but I'm not sure), it would be okay to include a sample, for people to provide feedback about as to whether it has too much detail. – aparente001 Jan 24 '17 at 6:09
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    How much is too much? More than this much. – David Richerby Jan 24 '17 at 12:35
  • Try writing no details then adding them until it gets boring. – only_pro Jan 29 at 16:55
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Most of the answers on here are adequate, however, I do not feel that they get straight to the point.

How much detail is too much?

I've read a few amateur stories online and sometimes the author will include so much detail that the reader gets a little bored or distracted and forgets what the actual story is talking about.

You have answered your own question:
Q: How much detail is too much?
A: When the reader gets a little bored or distracted and forgets what the actual story is talking about.

The details in a "fully expressed medium of text" (that is, a sentence, paragraph, article, book, or voluminous/episodic series) greatly influence attention. The center of attention is the focus.

Superfluous details are details that divert attention away from the focus. Consider the following:

I was dropped off at the usual bus stop that I attend every morning. It is a short stretch of concrete road with green signs, and four houses. There are two houses on each side. Each house is white. The lawns varied in shades of green and brown (it was early fall). When the bus finally arrived, I hopped on. Silence was in the cold air of the bus as students stared at their phones and closed their minds off from the real world to escape into the fantasy of the internet.

The focus of this paragraph is getting on the bus, but yet, all the detail is focusing on the surrounding environment of the bus stop, before abruptly transitioning to hopping on the bus which appeared out of no where.

Necessary details are consistent with the focus. Consider the following:

I came to this large, two-story house with overarching balconies and elegant columns. It was old—very old. I burst open the dusty, wooden double-doors that entered into the house. The room was dark, and had a musty, century-old odor to it. The black and white checkered tile pattern on the floor was heavily worn and coarse. The chandelier dangled askew. This was, no doubt, a dance hall, which told the story of a time long forgotten, when people twirled and danced to a merry tune.

The details in this paragraph dictate that the focus is an old house which had many ballroom-style dances. Every detail describes the age of this house, and the purpose is to give imagery of what the house looks like, and what the ambient atmosphere projects. Without these details, this would be a dull paragraph, and the actual lack of detail would bore and distract.


Detail is of course only one element of influence for the audience's attention, but it is clearly displayed that it does have a great impact on attention. The detail determines the focus,

so how much detail is too much?

When the details shift attention away from the center of attention.

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    answer had too much detail; couldn't read. – Stachu Jan 23 '17 at 20:36
  • I was going to write an answer focusing on the importance of description that is essential to create the mood of the story, but you beat me to it. – Sara Costa Jan 23 '17 at 20:52
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    On a second thought, what I consider a brilliant description is too much description for most of my students. Of course they are mostly happy to read a flood of action verbs and ignore the rest. I think they'd love telegrams. – Sara Costa Jan 23 '17 at 20:54
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You said it yourself. When the reader cannot concentrate on the story because there are so many adjectives and adverbs, and other details and flourishes. Get other people to read your writing, and they will be able to easily comment on this.

You are also falling into having too much detail if every other word is an adjective or adverb. If you're describing every noun or verb with them, stop it. It's really bad and will lead to the thing I said above. Here's an example:

I furiously knocked on the brown oak door, and impatiently waited for my annoying brother to finally arrive.

That sentence is a little extreme but I have seen things like it in the past. There are many things which would be implied by the story (even though we don't have a 'story' in this example). We can pick out some unnecessary descriptions:

  • The brother is annoying. We don't need to describe that because the protagonist would only be furiously knocking on the door if the brother had been doing something bad/annoying.

  • The brown oak door. This is really unnecessary. I don't need to be reminded of what a door looks like, it's one of those things you can leave for the reader to imagine. However, if there's a special door, you can describe it. For example, a door with spikes on.

  • Impatiently and finally. Impatiently is already implied, and if you wanted to further show this, you could perhaps write another sentence about him doing something impatient. Finally is just completely unnecessary and you don't really need it. It adds an extra not-needed adverb to the sentence.

I think that the amount of detail depends on the author though. It's very difficult to know if you're using too little or too much. So what I would advise is: use your peers to your advantage! Go onto a site like Critique Circle and get it critiqued.

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    In the case of the 'Brown Oak Door', it seems like one of Chekhov's principles apply. Unless the fact that the door is made of oak and brown is of some relevance to the story (e.g. It speaks to the personality of one of your characters, or helps define the location), then don't bother mentioning it. Just randomly describing the door as Oaken and Brown isn't interesting, but if you describe the general location as being run down then having a door made of Oak is interesting, as it's an unusual feature. Or if all the doors in the house are white except for this one. – SGR Jan 24 '17 at 11:44
  • A perfect contribution :). @SGR – Daniel Cann Jan 24 '17 at 15:13
  • Thank you for the link to Critique Circle. I've been looking for a website like this. Its perfect. – Williamz902 Jan 24 '17 at 22:00
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    "I rapped impatiently at the antique oak door, then stood fuming as I waited for Derek." – Wildcard Feb 7 '17 at 0:35
  • @SGR, in counterpoint to your comment, I offer the following quote from George R. R. Martin: "And if I'm guilty of having gratuitous sex, then I'm also guilty of having gratuitous violence, and gratuitous feasting, and gratuitous description of clothes, and gratuitous heraldry, because very little of this is necessary to advance the plot. But my philosophy is that plot advancement is not what the experience of reading fiction is about. If all we care about is advancing the plot, why read novels? We can just read Cliffs Notes." —G.R.R.M. – Wildcard Feb 14 '18 at 5:15
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Daniel's answer is good, but I have an additional "yardstick" which may be helpful:

Part of art, of any art form, is inviting the audience to contribute.

It's even been said this is what makes it art: A return contribution is invited. You supply something yourself as an audience or reader, rather than just having the words flow in at you without you yourself participating.

If you describe every tiny detail to such a degree that nothing is left to the imagination, you wind up with a court deposition, not a story. There's not going to be a great deal of interest, because the reader will not be invited to participate and use his imagination to fill in gaps.

If you consider carefully, you'll likely find that any story which really "pulled you in" was one in which you were actively participating in imagining the details and filling in "how it would have been," rather than one in which you were slavishly noting every last exhaustive detail directly from the author's description.

Other things besides physical descriptions can be left to the imagination too, of course. You need to provide enough detail to spur your reader's imagination to fill in the rest.


Something which goes along with this:

Don't use description to make your reader's imagination wrong.

If you introduce a character and keep him doing things and saying things for several chapters before you happen to mention that he has very dark skin and pale blonde hair, you are very likely to throw your reader out of the story. She will have come up with her own mental picture of how this character looks by then, and the description, coming so late, will make her feel that she "got it wrong." Really, the author is at fault for such a jolt.


Physical descriptions are a good thing to include, just don't stop the flow of the story to include them. Don't stop the action. It's not vital that your readers envision every detail just exactly the same way you do. Include enough that they get a colorful (vivid, evocative) picture of the events you depict—fully fleshed out by their own imagination, which you've coaxed into action with your masterful use of descriptive words.

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    Don't make your reader's imagination wrong => Agreed in general, I don't like jarring, but Sixth Sense is still a great movie ;) There's an "unless it's on purpose" there, as it can be used for effect. – Matthieu M. Jan 23 '17 at 10:48
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    @MatthieuM., a very good point! Very interesting! However, I would contend that that movie only works because Bruce Willis's character's imagination is also wrong. That's the plot twist. The audience knows everything that he knows, correctly. Quite a contrast with movies where the director cuts things in such a way as to deliberately mislead the audience, where the characters do know what's happening and only the audience is left in the dark. Such movies or books are more like a dumb joke ("See how much cleverer I am than you!") than a story in which you get really involved. – Wildcard Jan 23 '17 at 11:09
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    But yes, thinking on it more, there are possibly some other exceptions to that as well. The point about inviting participation or contribution is much closer to an "absolute rule" than the other. – Wildcard Jan 23 '17 at 11:15
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While the existing answers are helpful, they don't address what seems to me the crux of this question. The answers will change depending on what you are writing, for which audience and what effect do you hope to achieve?

For example, I primarily write journalism. The idea is to engage the reader quickly and carry them through to the end of the article. As a general rule it is good to keep descriptive writing to a minimum since it reduces the punchiness and impact of the work. Better instead to pluck a few well-chosen metaphors to help the reader relate what you're describing quickly and easily to their own experience.

Yet even this is subject to change depending on circumstance. A print article is generally subject to a draconian word count and you must be even more sparing with your descriptions. On the other hand if the feature is emotive in nature or is describing an external narrative, you will need to spend some time scene-setting.

Contrast this to the opening sentence of Cormac McCarthy's novel Suttree.

Dear friend now in the dusty clockless hours of the town when the streets lie black and steaming in the wake of the watertrucks and now when the drunk and the homeless have washed up in the lee of walls in alleys or abandoned lots and cats go forth highshouldered and lean in the grim perimeters about, now in these sootblacked brick or cobbled corridors where lightwire shadows make a gothic harp of cellar doors no soul shall walk save you.

This is grandiose to the point of impenetrability. If I tried anything like that, my editors would tear it apart and never employ me again. It's also way beyond the level other answers are suggesting you should take descriptive writing. Yet I find it an extraordinary scene-setter, brilliant in its eloquence. It works because it's well structured and because in the context of the work of a heavyweight novelist, we might expect such constructions.

In summary: your yardstick for measure whether you've got "too much" description depends entirely on the effect you're trying to achieve and your skill at building descriptions.

  • That's a wonderful scene setter. Very evocative and beautiful. I'll point out that it definitely involves the reader in contributing to it—actively filling in the details imaginatively rather than passively receiving—which is the fundamental point I was making in my answer. – Wildcard Jan 23 '17 at 13:00
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    @Wildcard I had already upvoted it :) – Matt Thrower Jan 23 '17 at 13:09
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To answer this question you have to consider the purpose of detail. The purpose of detail is to refine the picture in the reader's head. Readers pull images from their own stock of experiences to build a picture of what they are reading. Each detail you add refines the selection of images they make. If you say "bus" they select an image of the kind of bus they are most familiar with. If you say "red double-decker bus" they probably select an image of a London bus, unless they live in another city with red double-decker buses.

The image in the reader's head will probably never match the image in your head perfectly, unless you have had the exact same experience. The question is, how close do I need the image in the reader's head to be to the image in my head for them to receive the story, its mood and texture as well as its plot, in the way I intend. You add detail until you think the reader's image will be close enough to your own for story purposes.

I disagree with those who say you should leave something to the reader's imagination. That's moot. It all comes from the reader's imagination. You job is to direct that imagination into the right channels so that the reader receives the experience you are attempting to create.

A closely related question is, how closely do you paint each scene and each object in a scene. The more you refine an image, the more important you make that image. Don't make any image more important in a scene than it is in the story, or you will divert the reader's attention away from what matters in the story.

Finally, it is really more about finding the right detail than it is about the amount of detail. Think of it like a database query on the user's stock of experiences. Certain details will pull up certain images whole and intact. A swastika armband may be the only detail you need to pull up the image of a Nazi soldier, for instance. This is what is often called the telling detail, and finding the telling detail is far more important than how much detail you provide. The telling detail can not only pull out a particular object but the entire scene, the entire time and place to which that object belongs. Thus the red double-decker evokes London, the swastika armband evokes Nazi Germany.

Finally, be wary of details that seem contradictory or are hard to integrate. Adding one more term to a database query can turn it from retrieving a very precise image to returning no data at all.

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    I love how you always look at things from different angles, Mark. Your answers are always interesting to read. – Daniel Cann Jan 23 '17 at 15:15
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    @DanielCann, that's because they have just the right amount of detail. ;) – Wildcard Aug 11 '17 at 2:14

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