Good day everyone,
I have the following sentence:
Around 70% of small businesses in the United States struggle to hire qualified employees, and around 50% attribute this challenge to candidates' lack of skillset needed for the job. This is our area of focus.
My issues are as follow:
- The word around is repeated twice, and hence feels redundant
- I am not sure if people feel that "this is our area of focus" ties directly to candidate lack of skill set of the general problem which is hiring qualified employees.
- I am not sure if they clearly understand what "this challenge" refers to.
Any suggestions would be greatly appreciated. I am mainly targeting hiring managers looking for developers in small businesses.