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I want to rewrite my sentence in technical writing style. Could you help me rewrite my sentence? Thank you in advance

The proposed methods has 4 variables need to update in a optimization process, comparison with 2 variables in the method A, 3 variables in method B. Thus, it requires more time consuming, but it provides more accuracy.

The sentence means the proposed method has 4 variables which need to updates in a optimization process. More variables tends to more accuracy, but it is less effective in computational time.

closed as off-topic by Ken Mohnkern, Monica Cellio Apr 8 '16 at 18:46

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  • Welcome to Writers. Rephrasing requests are off-topic here (see the links in the on-hold notice), but it's also not clear what you mean by "technical writing style". There's not just one style; it varies by type of writing and by audience. – Monica Cellio Apr 8 '16 at 18:48
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I'd probably write it something like this:

The proposed method uses 4 variables, 2 more than method A and one more than method B. This gives a more accurate result, but it requires more computational time.

  • How about if I list some methods in existing methods as: 2 variables of method A, 1 variables of method A and 3 variables of method C. Can I use "instead of". And third variables is not cause to complexity. Number of variable is reason why more computational time – John Apr 8 '16 at 15:47
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    Now I'm confused. Can you edit the question to include all relevant information because your comment adds information you didn't include originally? – TriskalJM Apr 8 '16 at 16:21
  • I updated it. I used 4 variable to in my text, instead of 3 in previous text – John Apr 8 '16 at 16:36

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