I don't know how to reword this:
Along the way, we see how the faults Jacob made earlier in life are repeated back on him.
I know
repeated back on him
doesn't sound correct, but I don't know what to replace it with.
Any ideas?
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Sign up to join this communityI don't know how to reword this:
Along the way, we see how the faults Jacob made earlier in life are repeated back on him.
I know
repeated back on him
doesn't sound correct, but I don't know what to replace it with.
Any ideas?
first of all, it's "the mistakes" he made — one doesn't make faults
we see how the faults Jacob made earlier in his life begin to bleed back into his existence, recurring endlessly like an abyss in trepidation, an inflatable nightmare; draining through fading, whispered telephone conversations in the winter drear.