I am trying to write a marketing slogan to draw people's interest. Because it's a slogan I only have a few words to do this in. How do I use just a few words to make the reader want to know more? Should I focus on action verbs, use colorful adjectives, or what?

Currently my slogan is:

Making deliveries more convenient.

This is true but does not feel exciting. The idea is that we provide package pickup boxes in your neighborhood, where your mailbox is.

How do I make a slogan more clear and also "catchy"?

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