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I don't want to use "I" at the beginning of ever paragraph. What other word could I use in this paragraph?

Example:

"I thought, “Is this a death sentence?” I was scared to death of Death. I was sitting on the end of the exam table which was directly facing the doorway. I wanted to run away, far away.
I jumped off the exam table, but my legs gave way. I fell backward onto the table.

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Rephrase things so that you don't need to start sentences with "I":

"Is this a death sentence?" was the first thought that occurred to me. Death scared me to death. The exam table was directly facing the doorway, and I was sitting at its end. I wanted to run away, far away. As I jumped off the exam table, my legs gave way, and I fell back onto it.

What I did was use other things as the subject of the sentence (and "I ..." became "... me"), or introduce sentences using prepositions. That isn't to say that as few sentences as possible should start without "I" (I couldn't find a way to change "I wanted to run..."), because that would be just as stilted.

If you're unsure what you've written flows well, read it aloud. I think it's more likely that your eyes will skim over repetitions, but your ears will catch them.

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  • Your comment really help. Now I will start reading it aloud.
    – Rbrown
    Commented Jan 22, 2020 at 11:41

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