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You can carry the same subject through multiple actions in the same sentence without repeating "she" (or her name) over and over again; the subject in each additional clause should be clear to the reader. Something like:

Jane opened her eyes and reached out toward her screeching alarm, fumbling as always to silence it before it woke the neighbor's dog, then swung her feet toward the cold wood floor.

In a similar way, you can wait and place your subject until later in the sentence, increasing the distance between your repetitions:

Shuffling slowly across the cold floor to the bathroom, she squinted at her reflection in the harsh vanity light while fishing for her toothbrush.

You can carry the same subject through multiple actions in the same sentence without repeating "she" (or her name) over and over again; the subject in each additional clause should be clear to the reader. Something like:

Jane opened her eyes and reached out toward her screeching alarm, fumbling as always to silence it before it woke the neighbor's dog, then swung her feet toward the cold wood floor.

In a similar way, you can wait and place your subject until later in the sentence, increasing the distance between your repetitions:

Shuffling slowly across the cold floor to the bathroom, she squinted at her reflection in the harsh vanity light while fishing for her toothbrush.

You can carry the same subject through multiple actions in the same sentence without repeating "she" (or her name) over and over again; the subject in each additional clause should be clear to the reader. Something like:

Jane opened her eyes and reached out toward her screeching alarm, fumbling as always to silence it before it woke the neighbor's dog, then swung her feet toward the cold wood floor.

In a similar way, you can wait and place your subject later in the sentence, increasing the distance between your repetitions:

Shuffling slowly across the cold floor to the bathroom, she squinted at her reflection in the harsh vanity light while fishing for her toothbrush.

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You can carry the same subject through multiple actions in the same sentence without repeating "she" (or her name) over and over again; the subject in each additional clause should be clear to the reader. Something like:

Jane opened her eyes and reached out toward her screeching alarm, fumbling as always to silence it before it woke the neighbor's dog, then swung her feet toward the cold wood floor.

In a similar way, you can wait and place your subject until later in the sentence, increasing the distance between your repetitions:

Shuffling slowly across the cold floor to the bathroom, she squinted at her reflection in the harsh vanity light while fishing for her toothbrush.