Timeline for How to avoid using "she" repetitively in action?
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| May 10, 2022 at 16:51 | comment | added | Stuart F | There's a lot of issues here. The title is confusing because this isn't really a depiction of action, but of internal thought processes. You don't need to say "She started wondering how her day would be" when you can express the character's thoughts directly. There are many ways you can break up long "she did this, she did that" passages, from sentence fragments ("Step. Cold. Bathroom floor.") to longer sentences and varying perspective. Which you choose is a matter of style, genre, and what effect you want to give. | |
| May 9, 2022 at 17:30 | history | edited | Laurel♦ | CC BY-SA 4.0 |
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| Nov 10, 2021 at 6:00 | history | tweeted | twitter.com/StackWriting/status/1458313491346083841 | ||
| Sep 30, 2021 at 7:21 | comment | added | DM_with_secrets | @Luana As JRE implied, don't worry about whether you're using 'she' too much, or breaking any other 'rules' from the internet. Just keep reading, writing and revising :) | |
| Sep 30, 2021 at 7:20 | comment | added | DM_with_secrets | @JRE You make a very good point. I was going to ask whether OP had considered writing in their native language, but that would only solve the grammatical issues. Honestly, I think the answer is time. I'm sure I wrote like this when I was starting out. | |
| Sep 29, 2021 at 14:34 | answer | added | BradC | timeline score: 7 | |
| Sep 29, 2021 at 9:59 | comment | added | JRE | Shifting between past to present tense and the over-use of "she" are the smallest problems in that text. | |
| Sep 29, 2021 at 7:27 | history | edited | JRE | CC BY-SA 4.0 |
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| Sep 29, 2021 at 4:47 | comment | added | Erk | Does this answer your question? How to replace overuse of "I" in a short story, fiction, written in the first person | |
| Sep 29, 2021 at 1:01 | comment | added | DWKraus | I would add that my editor advises to use the pronoun for someone every other usage. so "Jane...she...jane...her...jane...she..." This breaks up the pronoun overuses and continuously reinforces who the "she" is. I also noticed you were shifting from present to past tense and back unexpectedly, and it was kind of jarring. | |
| Sep 29, 2021 at 0:16 | comment | added | DM_with_secrets | Have you tried studying the way the authors of your favourite books do this? | |
| Sep 28, 2021 at 23:11 | answer | added | Mary | timeline score: 2 | |
| Sep 28, 2021 at 21:47 | comment | added | Laurel♦ | Does this answer your question? Alternative word for "she" | |
| Sep 28, 2021 at 20:50 | review | Close votes | |||
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| Sep 28, 2021 at 20:29 | answer | added | Erin Tesden | timeline score: 0 | |
| S Sep 28, 2021 at 20:01 | review | First questions | |||
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| S Sep 28, 2021 at 20:01 | history | asked | Luana Bourgard | CC BY-SA 4.0 |