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A)Each Each chapter has one person as the protagonist,but but there are some bonus chapters.For For example,after after John's and Lily'd chapterLily's chapters (first ansand second) there would be another one that focuses totally on the group and how the previous chapters affected them.This This should be filled with conflict and written in a way to make people want to read further.

B)the The second way is that the first time John plays the major role,but but each chapter loosesloses the significance of the protagonist a bit.In In the second,John John and Lily are the stars,in in the 3.third even Lucy has a bigger part  (while others have minor parts, of course). Until the 6.sixth chapter,where where only 1 charactersone character gets left out a bit.And And in the final chapter of course,everybody everybody has the same role and every resolution getsis played out.

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A)Each chapter has one person as the protagonist,but there are some bonus chapters.For example,after John's and Lily'd chapter(first ans second) there would be another one that focuses totally on the group and how the previous chapters affected them.This should be filled with conflict and written in a way to make people want to read further.

B)the second way is that the first time John plays the major role,but each chapter looses the significance of the protagonist a bit.In the second,John and Lily are the stars,in the 3. even Lucy has a bigger part(while others have minor parts of course) Until the 6. chapter,where only 1 characters gets left out a bit.And the final chapter of course,everybody has the same role and every resolution gets played out.

What do you think about these two possibilities? Thank you for helping me be a little bit better!

A) Each chapter has one person as the protagonist, but there are some bonus chapters. For example, after John's and Lily's chapters (first and second) there would be another one that focuses totally on the group and how the previous chapters affected them. This should be filled with conflict and written in a way to make people want to read further.

B) The second way is that the first time John plays the major role, but each chapter loses the significance of the protagonist a bit. In the second, John and Lily are the stars, in the third even Lucy has a bigger part  (while others have minor parts, of course). Until the sixth chapter, where only one character gets left out a bit. And in the final chapter of course, everybody has the same role and every resolution is played out.

What do you think about these two possibilities?

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A)Each chapter has one person as the protagonist,but there are some bonus chapters.For example,after John's and Lily'd chapter(first ans second) there would be another one that focuses totally on the group and how the previous chapters affected them.This should be filled with conflict and written in a way to make people want to read further.

B)the second way is that the first time John plays the major role,but each chapter looses the significance of the protagonist a bit.In the second,John and Lily are the stars,in the 3. even Lucy has a bigger part(while others have minor parts of course) Until the 6. chapter,where only 1 characters gets left out a bit.And the final chapter of course,everybody has the same role and every resolution gets played out.

What do you think about these two possibilities? Thank you for helping me be a little bit better!

Thank you for helping me be a little bit better!

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A)Each chapter has one person as the protagonist,but there are some bonus chapters.For example,after John's and Lily'd chapter(first ans second) there would be another one that focuses totally on the group and how the previous chapters affected them.This should be filled with conflict and written in a way to make people want to read further.

B)the second way is that the first time John plays the major role,but each chapter looses the significance of the protagonist a bit.In the second,John and Lily are the stars,in the 3. even Lucy has a bigger part(while others have minor parts of course) Until the 6. chapter,where only 1 characters gets left out a bit.And the final chapter of course,everybody has the same role and every resolution gets played out.

What do you think about these two possibilities? Thank you for helping me be a little bit better!

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different kind of Does my story structure,would this work out for an ensemble zombie story sound effective?

first of all English isn't my first language,and it isn't the language that I write.I will make some mistakes,so please only answer if you can overcome this fact.Thank you!

I wrote 1 book and several shorts stories,and for about one year i am writing the next one.It'sI'm working on a novel about the psyhologicalpsychological struggle of 7 characters.I don't know what's the name in writing,but in movies i think they call it It's got an ensemble cast,when where every character has the same importance.The premise I've got a structure for this that sounds good to me, but seems different than most novel structures I'm familiar with; I want to know if my structure sounds workable and effective.

The premise is that a group of 6 travel to one city which is rumored to be safe from zombies.It isn't,and there another person saves them.Here Here is the catch,i: I want to distance myself from horror and dwelldelve into the mindminds of these people,who who now have the time to form more intricate relationships.

Each In the second part of the book, each character is broken,and and each taketakes it in a different way.Now that you understand what's happening,here comes my questions.How should i create this 2 worlds?I wrote the first part,the interactions are shallow with some spikes

Here's the structure I'm working with:

  • In the first part of the book (which I've already written), the interactions are shallow with some spikes that show how they feel one for another,but in a world where you constantly run you don't even have the time to develop something more complex.
  • In the second part (still unwritten), I want to analyze each character in one chapter. Each chapter destroys one character with a dramatic event,they discover or get past they're fears,only realising that the war for survival is not over,and so each having parts in all individual stories.The idea is that one dramatic story shakes the character completely,gives them a new enemy so to speak,a new reason to live.That conflict(which is the key part of my vision) should slowly change each chapter,and only after the final climax everybody should really know themselves.

My concern with this structure is that show how they feel one for another,but in a world where you constantly run you don't even have the time to develop something more complex.I thought of it this way,in the second part to analyze each character in one chapter.But i am afraid of hurting themmay be confusing to much,and making the reader uninterestedreaders.Each This structure has each chapter destroys one character withfocusing on a dramatic event,they discover or get past they're fears,only realising that the war for survival is not over,and so each having parts in all individual stories.The idea is that one dramatic story shakes thedifferent character completely,gives them a new enemy so to speak,a new reason to live.That conflict(which is with the key part of my vision) shouldother characters developing more slowly change eachin that chapter,and only after the final climax everybody should really know themselves.

Here is one example,of the first character to transform.John was alwajs a drone,doing Will readers "get" what others say.Now he is living with Elise(another survivor,not from the main cast,which is dying).She tells him not to go for help,because she wants the last moments of her life to be with a human.He is stubborn and against his principles triesI'm trying to do something to save her,only to miss out on the last hours of her life.He is shocked and destroyed,but the best word wouldwith this structure? Will they be lost.He is leftable to follow along with no path,and he must forge another.this is how his chapter ends.

Chapter 2.While another character is tested,John realizes that he must serve,but not only one.he decides that he will do nothing until that special person appears.

Chapter 3 the struggle doesn't go away,he just can't live alone even if he wantsso many characters,so he decides to help them from the shadows.He is discovered developing at the end

Chapter 4 the main character of this chapter becomes that hero he wishes for,so he beginssuch uneven paces? Are there improvements you'd suggest to serve again without question

Chapter 5 He is reminded of his loss,so he goes berserk killing zombiesmy story structure,becoming again just or perhaps a soulless weapon.

Chapter 6 again the circumstances make him struggle,he starts to feel again for another women,but he can't erase the pain from his hearth,and the fear that it will happen again.different structure entirely?

Chapter 7 the last one.A lot happens hereHere is an example of a single character arc,but inof the end he realizes that everyone has a place in this world.He accepts his but without a womenfirst character to live,just in his memory maybe,and the story ends..transform. 

John was always a drone,doing what others say.

  • In his focus chapter, he is living with Elise(another survivor,not from the main cast,who is dying).She tells him not to go for help,because she wants the last moments of her life to be with a human.He is stubborn and against his principles tries to do something to save her,only to miss out on the last hours of her life.He is shocked and destroyed,but the best word would be lost.He is left with no path,and he must forge another.this is how his chapter ends.
  • Chapter 2: While another character is tested,John realizes that he must serve,but not only one.he decides that he will do nothing until that special person appears.
  • Chapter 3: the struggle doesn't go away,he just can't live alone even if he wants,so he decides to help them from the shadows.He is discovered at the end
  • Chapter 4: the main character of this chapter becomes that hero he wishes for,so he begins to serve again without question
  • Chapter 5: He is reminded of his loss,so he goes berserk killing zombies,becoming again just a soulless weapon.
  • Chapter 6: again the circumstances make him struggle,he starts to feel again for another women,but he can't erase the pain from his hearth,and the fear that it will happen again.
  • Chapter 7: the last one.A lot happens here,but in the end he realizes that everyone has a place in this world.He accepts his but without a women to live,just in his memory maybe,and the story ends...

This model would apply to all 7 characters,each having: each character would have the center position in they'retheir own focus chapter. Thank you very much for reading,i didn't want to write so much but my passion got the better of me.To much heart and time i have putdeveloping gradually along their character arc in this project of minethe other chapters. Again,and if even one person will respond than my question is whether this long post was not uselessstructure sounds feasible, clear, and effective.Thank

Thank you for helping me be a little bit better!

QUESTION

After the first part of the book,would it be okay if i made 7 chapters where each character has a key role(in turns)focusing on they're development while others develop only a bit.Would people get that?or is there anothet format that is better? Thank you!

EDIT 2 for justkt♦ That outline was an example.I would do that with each character,but John is the first one.Thank you for answering!

different kind of story structure,would this work out?

first of all English isn't my first language,and it isn't the language that I write.I will make some mistakes,so please only answer if you can overcome this fact.Thank you!

I wrote 1 book and several shorts stories,and for about one year i am writing the next one.It's about the psyhological struggle of 7 characters.I don't know what's the name in writing,but in movies i think they call it ensemble cast,when every character has the same importance.The premise is that a group of 6 travel to one city which is rumored to be safe from zombies.It isn't,and there another person saves them.Here is the catch,i want to distance myself from horror and dwell into the mind of these people,who now have the time to form more intricate relationships.

Each character is broken,and each take it in a different way.Now that you understand what's happening,here comes my questions.How should i create this 2 worlds?I wrote the first part,the interactions are shallow with some spikes that show how they feel one for another,but in a world where you constantly run you don't even have the time to develop something more complex.I thought of it this way,in the second part to analyze each character in one chapter.But i am afraid of hurting them to much,and making the reader uninterested.Each chapter destroys one character with a dramatic event,they discover or get past they're fears,only realising that the war for survival is not over,and so each having parts in all individual stories.The idea is that one dramatic story shakes the character completely,gives them a new enemy so to speak,a new reason to live.That conflict(which is the key part of my vision) should slowly change each chapter,and only after the final climax everybody should really know themselves.

Here is one example,of the first character to transform.John was alwajs a drone,doing what others say.Now he is living with Elise(another survivor,not from the main cast,which is dying).She tells him not to go for help,because she wants the last moments of her life to be with a human.He is stubborn and against his principles tries to do something to save her,only to miss out on the last hours of her life.He is shocked and destroyed,but the best word would be lost.He is left with no path,and he must forge another.this is how his chapter ends.

Chapter 2.While another character is tested,John realizes that he must serve,but not only one.he decides that he will do nothing until that special person appears.

Chapter 3 the struggle doesn't go away,he just can't live alone even if he wants,so he decides to help them from the shadows.He is discovered at the end

Chapter 4 the main character of this chapter becomes that hero he wishes for,so he begins to serve again without question

Chapter 5 He is reminded of his loss,so he goes berserk killing zombies,becoming again just a soulless weapon.

Chapter 6 again the circumstances make him struggle,he starts to feel again for another women,but he can't erase the pain from his hearth,and the fear that it will happen again.

Chapter 7 the last one.A lot happens here,but in the end he realizes that everyone has a place in this world.He accepts his but without a women to live,just in his memory maybe,and the story ends...

This model would apply to all characters,each having the center position in they're chapter. Thank you very much for reading,i didn't want to write so much but my passion got the better of me.To much heart and time i have put in this project of mine,and if even one person will respond than this long post was not useless.Thank you for helping me be a little bit better!

QUESTION

After the first part of the book,would it be okay if i made 7 chapters where each character has a key role(in turns)focusing on they're development while others develop only a bit.Would people get that?or is there anothet format that is better? Thank you!

EDIT 2 for justkt♦ That outline was an example.I would do that with each character,but John is the first one.Thank you for answering!

Does my story structure for an ensemble zombie story sound effective?

I'm working on a novel about the psychological struggle of 7 characters. It's got an ensemble cast, where every character has the same importance. I've got a structure for this that sounds good to me, but seems different than most novel structures I'm familiar with; I want to know if my structure sounds workable and effective.

The premise is that a group of 6 travel to one city which is rumored to be safe from zombies.It isn't,and there another person saves them. Here is the catch: I want to distance myself from horror and delve into the minds of these people, who now have the time to form more intricate relationships. In the second part of the book, each character is broken, and each takes it in a different way.

Here's the structure I'm working with:

  • In the first part of the book (which I've already written), the interactions are shallow with some spikes that show how they feel one for another,but in a world where you constantly run you don't even have the time to develop something more complex.
  • In the second part (still unwritten), I want to analyze each character in one chapter. Each chapter destroys one character with a dramatic event,they discover or get past they're fears,only realising that the war for survival is not over,and so each having parts in all individual stories.The idea is that one dramatic story shakes the character completely,gives them a new enemy so to speak,a new reason to live.That conflict(which is the key part of my vision) should slowly change each chapter,and only after the final climax everybody should really know themselves.

My concern with this structure is that it may be confusing to readers. This structure has each chapter focusing on a different character, with the other characters developing more slowly in that chapter. Will readers "get" what I'm trying to do with this structure? Will they be able to follow along with so many characters, developing at such uneven paces? Are there improvements you'd suggest to my story structure, or perhaps a different structure entirely?

Here is an example of a single character arc,of the first character to transform. 

John was always a drone,doing what others say.

  • In his focus chapter, he is living with Elise(another survivor,not from the main cast,who is dying).She tells him not to go for help,because she wants the last moments of her life to be with a human.He is stubborn and against his principles tries to do something to save her,only to miss out on the last hours of her life.He is shocked and destroyed,but the best word would be lost.He is left with no path,and he must forge another.this is how his chapter ends.
  • Chapter 2: While another character is tested,John realizes that he must serve,but not only one.he decides that he will do nothing until that special person appears.
  • Chapter 3: the struggle doesn't go away,he just can't live alone even if he wants,so he decides to help them from the shadows.He is discovered at the end
  • Chapter 4: the main character of this chapter becomes that hero he wishes for,so he begins to serve again without question
  • Chapter 5: He is reminded of his loss,so he goes berserk killing zombies,becoming again just a soulless weapon.
  • Chapter 6: again the circumstances make him struggle,he starts to feel again for another women,but he can't erase the pain from his hearth,and the fear that it will happen again.
  • Chapter 7: the last one.A lot happens here,but in the end he realizes that everyone has a place in this world.He accepts his but without a women to live,just in his memory maybe,and the story ends...

This model would apply to all 7 characters: each character would have the center position in their own focus chapter, and developing gradually along their character arc in the other chapters. Again, my question is whether this structure sounds feasible, clear, and effective.

Thank you for helping me be a little bit better!

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